raikou shishi

[shinji]

Name: raikou shishi(lightning lion)

Type: vizard Zanpaktou
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Details

Affinity/Theme: lightning (banki kido based)

Spirit Appearance (Zanpaktou only): a large lion made out of electricity
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General Abilities:

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Unreleased Form

Picture:

Description: a katana with a blade that is 3/5 ft long and a handle that is 6 inches long, it has no handgaurd

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Shikai (Second Form)

Picture: (Optional)

Release Command: show them the power of the beast from above!

Description: when the command is spoken, it grows into a blade made of lightning that’s 2 ft wide and can grow up to 50 ft tall with a lions head at the end

Abilities:

Ability 1: can attack an enemy at long range

Ability 2: can shock an enemy


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Bankai (Final form)

Picture: (Optional)

Description: the sword returns to its original form but a dome the size of a football field is created with lightning going off in the dome, the user can ride into the clouds on a griffon made out of electricity

Abilities: What are your Bankai’s special abilities?

Ability 1: the enemy has half his reitsu level passed to the swords user the down side is it can only last for five posts

Ability 2: when it is dispelled, it shrinks and becomes a small glass ball of spiritual pressure, he can blast it a an enemy

[Kensei]

Think you spelled "bankai" wrong for "banki".

Oh, and bankai ability no. 1:

the enemy can become delusional

To what extent?

[Monty2289]

Yeah I'd have to ask the same thing. Players have to understand wording when they make app. When the opposition becomes "delusional" that term needs to be put into a form that is suitable for the RP. The abilities for certain areas are all over the place though.

Like for instance. The abilities presented by your shikai. Considering the aspects of lightning in general and the length of your weapon [in the description] isn't it kind of obvious that it can do those things. Infact, Its general abilities in its shikai is the description.

Secondly, half of your bankai is completely useless. What's the point in it creating an additional 100 yards of space only for you disregard said space and ride lightning into the sky in order to attack opponents? Your bankai doesn't mention the purpose for the dome. Unless it's some kind of aesthetic property created.

[Shadow_Skill89]

to me this seems like an electrified version of Renjis zabimaru... It may not seem like it to anyone else but its just what I picture...

[shinji]

Really, I was basing the shiki on hitsugias, the bankai I made up

[Shadow_Skill89]

I think what monty is looking for is you putting moreeffort into the description of your attacks... like attack at long range... what kind of description is that??? I think the finer details are the only problem you have...

[shinji]

edit (thanks shadow skill )

[Shadow_Skill89]

well since its an attack, you should come up with a name for both of them... unless your weapon is just a draining type in general I guess... Which it doesnt seem to be so a name for your attacks would probably help...

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